2016 Summer Lyric Contest Winners Announced

SEMIFINALIST
Addiction by Ireland Casteel, Grapevine, TX
Blue Collar Man by Charles Carter, Dallas, Tx
River of Memories by Charles Carter, Dallas, TX
The Whole Nine Yards by John Coughlin, Eureka, MO
Angels and Strangers by Bill Kapac, Williamstown, NJ
Friday Night by Bill Kapac, Williamstown, NJ
Open Blinds by Bill Kapac, Williamstown, NJ

Barbe presenting to Ireland at the Awards Dinner in Dec 2016

Ireland is a local singer songwriter who, even at the young age of 15, is a storyteller at heart that effortlessly captivates listeners with lyrics that speak directly to the audience.  She started writing songs and playing guitar and ukulele at age 12 and has over 20 originals already under her belt! Ireland is also a winner in the Song Contest with her song Eenie Meenie.

1st Place  Addiction by Ireland Casteel, Grapevine, TX

Verse 1:
She was in trouble
Thought I’d lend a hand
She said she’d never let it go
Not again
But she loved that feeling
The freedom and the rush
Guess promises get broken
Things get tough

Chorus:
I thought we could climb mountains
You wanted to fly high
I took the trodden path
You took to the sky
You said that I gave up
I said you got way too high
Then I found you strung out
And I just have to say goodbye goodbye goodbye

Verse 2:
I hear the stories
Every now and then
About a broken lonely girl
Who used to be my friend
Can’t help but thinking
What she could’ve been
But I tried and couldn’t save her
In the end

Chorus:
I thought we could climb mountains
You wanted to fly high
I took the trodden path
You took to the sky
You said that I gave up
I said you got way too high
Then I found you strung out
And I just have to say goodbye goodbye goodbye

Verse 3:
We’re all standing here
Dressed in black
The scent of lilies in the air
And lilacs
I never said goodbye
Never got the chance
We were never in the same place
Or circumstance

Chorus:
I thought we could climb mountains
You wanted to fly high
I took the trodden path
You took to the sky
You said that I gave up
I said you got way too high
Then I found you strung out
And I just have to say goodbye goodbye goodbye
This is a very good song in most respects except for the hook.  While the title of the song accurately describes the storyline, it appears nowhere in the song and would make it very hard for a listener to know the name of the song if it wasn’t told to them.  A better title would be “Goodbye Goodbye Goodbye” or just “Goodbye” because it appears at the end of each chorus.  However, overall this is a very good song.  The form of the song is verse/chorus which works very well in telling a story of addiction with a beginning and an end in the verses and then summarizing the whole situation in the chorus.  The rhyme scheme is very consistent and the rhymes are very good even though perfect rhyming is not used throughout.  The lyrics are very good at creating pictures in the mind, and the song is very good overall in evoking emotional impact.

2nd Place  Blue Collar Man by Charles Carter, Dallas, Tx
(Verse 1)
I’m a blue-collar man
In a white-collar world
And I can’t buy her love
With diamonds and pearls
I can barely get by
But I’ll—give it a whirl
If this blue-collar man
Has his blue-collar girl

(Verse 2)
My blue-collar girl
She could have so much more
In the—white-collar world
She lived in before
But she chose my Chevy pickup truck
And we’re—not exactly poor
But thank God she’s working part time
Down at the Dollar Store

(Chorus)
A blue-collar man
Must fight for what he’s got
And he can’t go pretending
To be what he is not
Your collar might be white
But don’t ever put me down
Or ever make me feel
Like a—blue-collar clown

(Verse 3)
Our house is on a dead end street
And on the wrong side of the tracks
And I wonder if she looks around
And longs for what she lacks
But she says she has the world
In the palm of her hand
If this—blue-collar girl
Has her blue-collar man

(chorus)
A blue-collar man
Must fight for what he’s got
And he can’t go pretending
To be what he is not
Your collar might be white
But don’t ever put me down
Or ever make me feel
Like a—blue-collar clown

I warned you once
I’m not gonna warn you twice
You white-collar clown

(Verse 1)
I’m a blue-collar man
In a—white-collar world
And I can’t buy her love
With—diamonds and pearls
I can barely get by
But I’ll—give it a whirl
If this blue-collar man
Has his—blue-collar girl
If this blue-collar man
Has his blue-collar girl
The strength of this song is its simplicity in relating strong feelings about being a “blue collar man” in a relationship with a woman that used to live in a “white collar world”.  It has a good title hook that’s repeated in both the verses and chorus.  It does a good job of telling a relatable story with understandable and thought provoking lyrics.  The rhyme scheme is consistent throughout and the structure is good as a verse/verse/chorus/verse/chorus/outro with a repeat of the first verse at the end of the song. But the song might work better if it went to a chorus/verse/chorus/outro structure and left off the first verse at the end.  Overall, the song does a good job of evoking emotional impact and truth.

3rd Place     River of Memories by Charles Carter, Dallas, TX
Float down the River, who’s that ahead
It’s Mom and Daddy and me as a lad
They wave back at me, so happily
That’s how it was and always will be
(CHORUS)
Down by the River of Memories
The River takes you wherever you please
Nostalgic breezes drift through the trees
Down by the RIVER OF MEMORIES
(VERSE 2)
Float down the river, just around the bend
She stands there waiting, like she’s always been
She was my first love, but she got away
I still regret it, to this very day
(REPEAT CHORUS)
(VERSE 3)
Float down the river, what do I see
A family picnic, a young family
My first wife and children, a much thinner me
The kids are grown now, a sad history
(REPEAT CHORUS)
 This song does a good job of relating some personal family memories of the past in a simple way.  It has a good hook in the title that is repeated at the end of each chorus.  The verse/chorus structure does a good job of relating short snippets of a memories in the verse and summing up with the chorus.  The rhyme form is good in the verses with an AABB structure but it deviates to AAAA in the last verse.  The rhymes are good though perfect rhyming is not used throughout.  The song does a good job of creating mind pictures but the last verse also creates an unanswered question with the last line “The kids are all grown now, a sad history”.  The verse/chorus form would allow for some additional verses to tell more of the story, but overall this is a good song in evoking emotional impact.